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Futurama <futurama@dds.nl> wrote:

>Hello,

>I've written the following text about the school system in Belgium,
>compared to a very interesting school in the UK, Summerhill.  I thought
>it would be interesting to put it in the newsgroups.  I hope you like it
>!  Oh yes... as this is a creative writing exercise for school, will you
>please be so kind to correct any mistakes ?  That would be very helpful.

>Thanx,

>Christine L.

 (snip)

Christine,

I'd like to congratulate you - I found no serious mistakes in your
essay, and I think that you make several valid points.

There are a couple of unusual phrases; "A thing that holds my
attention is..." - I would write "I am interested to see (or to
notice) that..."; and, "we know wherefore we are here" is
old-fashioned, even 18th-century: I would say "we know why we are
here". Hope that helps.

Summerhill School is controversial - that is, the cause of a lot of
argument. On the one hand some people have said how wonderful it is,
for the same reasons as you do. On the other, it has been said that
there is a great deal of bad language, loose sexual morality, theft
and even drugtaking.

I wonder if you are aware that A S Neill died some years ago and his
daughter now runs the school. Some people consider that, without his
dynamic and charismatic leadership, the school has lost its way.

Comme vous etes Belgique, votre langue maternelle serait francais,
n'est-ce pas? 


Regards

Richard Foxcroft

richardf@enterprise.net

Telford, Shropshire, England