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Article #5982Re: bakeries
From: Brian Baresch
Date: Tue, 02 Mar 2004 08:00
Date: Tue, 02 Mar 2004 08:00
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On Mon, 01 Mar 2004 20:13:55 GMT, "lucy" <seacoast65@sbcglobal.net> wrote: >testing Capitalization: F Punctuation: F Brevity: A Plot: D- While the post lacks originality, and is extremely weak in plot, character development and motivation, it does follow the tradition of terse dialogue inspired by Hemingway and others, as well as utilizing the style of e.e. cummings. The editors would suggest that future sequels and other submissions include more background and gradually introduce additional characters into the story as it unfolds. We look forward to seeing new and interesting manuscripts from this up-and-coming author. (I just saw this somewhere else and couldn't resist. Sorry.) -- Brian P. Baresch Fort Worth, Texas, USA Professional editing and proofreading If you're going through hell, keep going. --Winston Churchill
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