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Article #1160speech interruption
From: randal rheinheimer
Date: Sun, 22 Nov 1992 23:06
Date: Sun, 22 Nov 1992 23:06
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I've come across a problem in my all-too-amateurish writing and am asking those more experienced (or just more imaginative) for help. There is a certain flow I wish to maintain in putting a thought or a description inside a spoken sentence, but no particular construction seems right to me. Here is an example of the sort of thing I'm working with: She said, "I'm posting you about my problem--" Her hands became clumsy on the keyboard. "--and I hope you're able to help me." That's the best construction I had come up with, so I knew that it was past time to get help; it's just not right to put a complete sentence in the middle of the spoken phrase. Possibly the dashes could be placed outside the quotation marks: . . problem," --her hands became clumsy on the keyboard-- "and . . . A large part of the problem is that the flow, the feel of the passage is destroyed if I put the description somewhere more convenient. Any ideas--parentheses, maybe? Thanks for your help. Please post rather than mailing--my machine refuses to acknowledge existence beyond itself just now. Rand
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Newsgroups: misc.writing Path: arc1-ca.pugleaf.net!sparky!uunet!zaphod.mps.ohio-state.edu!cs.utexas.edu!sun-barr!ames!purdue!yuma!news From: randal@pylon.physics.colostate.edu (randal rheinheimer) Subject: speech interruption Sender: news@yuma.ACNS.ColoState.EDU (News Account) Message-ID: <Nov22.230654.45607@yuma.ACNS.ColoState.EDU> Date: Sun, 22 Nov 1992 23:06:54 GMT Nntp-Posting-Host: pylon.physics.colostate.edu Organization: Colorado State University, Fort Collins, CO 80523 Lines: 22