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Critique wanted, also - POEM

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From: Chokdee Robert
Date: Thu, 12 Nov 1992 05:40
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Please let me know what your thoughts are of this poem.  I wish to submit
for possible entry into a high-level poetry course at Boston U, where I study.
Please spare no feelings for it was Hegel that said:

"thesis + antithesis = synthesis"

So I need all those willing to respond to either e-mail me or leave a
response within the posting.  This is important to my future.  Thank you to all
those who respond.

Happy Thanksgiving.  I will begin it on the next page so that you don't have
to scroll over and possibly lose the image.


the one i love

i stand alone and splendidly i give the world my soul.
in the many colors of the fall, there lies the lucidity of white, the
unadorned innocence of the sunset, the garishness of evil with its many 
faces, and the blood of my frozen heart which lay hidden away among the
trees.

streaking through the sky into the arms of whatever god sleeps beyond the
emptiness of life is where my soul journeys.

i sit here in the mirror of creation, an unaccompanied soul in search of the
messiah.  there must be solidarity within the naked world of mirthful wishes
and musings.  and at the zenith of heaven, there must be valor--for if
valor sleeps undisturbed, my lonely soul will undoubtedly join the darkness
that prevails just beyond the sunset.

				- C. Robert Rutirasiri
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