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Article #926Critique wanted, also - POEM
From: Chokdee Robert
Date: Thu, 12 Nov 1992 05:40
Date: Thu, 12 Nov 1992 05:40
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Please let me know what your thoughts are of this poem. I wish to submit for possible entry into a high-level poetry course at Boston U, where I study. Please spare no feelings for it was Hegel that said: "thesis + antithesis = synthesis" So I need all those willing to respond to either e-mail me or leave a response within the posting. This is important to my future. Thank you to all those who respond. Happy Thanksgiving. I will begin it on the next page so that you don't have to scroll over and possibly lose the image. the one i love i stand alone and splendidly i give the world my soul. in the many colors of the fall, there lies the lucidity of white, the unadorned innocence of the sunset, the garishness of evil with its many faces, and the blood of my frozen heart which lay hidden away among the trees. streaking through the sky into the arms of whatever god sleeps beyond the emptiness of life is where my soul journeys. i sit here in the mirror of creation, an unaccompanied soul in search of the messiah. there must be solidarity within the naked world of mirthful wishes and musings. and at the zenith of heaven, there must be valor--for if valor sleeps undisturbed, my lonely soul will undoubtedly join the darkness that prevails just beyond the sunset. - C. Robert Rutirasiri
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Path: arc1-ca.pugleaf.net!sparky!uunet!ogicse!uwm.edu!rpi!bu.edu!crutiras From: crutiras@bu.edu (Chokdee Robert) Newsgroups: misc.writing Subject: Critique wanted, also - POEM Message-ID: <101643@bu.edu> Date: 12 Nov 92 05:40:28 GMT Article-I.D.: bu.101643 Sender: news@bu.edu Lines: 32 X-Newsreader: Tin 1.1 PL5